Maximizing Your Essay Success

After completing your application materials for your primary you can immediately begin working on secondary essays for your top school choices and that would be a strategic approach and also a lot of these questions are available as well on student dr. Network so that’s another reliable source where you can find them also creating an Excel spreadsheet as I mentioned earlier to track schools and deadlines I recommend listing all schools applied to lists the dates that you receive a secondary invitation and the dates the secondaries were submitted and this will help you keep track of your progress for all the schools and to stay focused and motivated through this long process. Find out how to achieve more in your essay with Robotdon.

Another thing you can do to maximize your success is to work with a professional editor and admissions consultant getting advice and editing assistance from an expert rate you will help improve your the quality of your writing and chances of gaining an interview and this can make a significant difference because often when you’re writing these questions you’ve already completed your MCAT and you may have difficulty seeing what they’re unique about you or what you would want to focus on that you haven’t already covered in your am cast application so having an objective outside person can provide you with more ideas and more a more strategic approach but also having people who are experts and who’ve served on missions committees in the past like those of us that accepted our com that can give you an edge in terms of giving you the most successful strategies or ideas or way to approach them so any questions before we move on for those of you listening are there any questions that you have before you move on okay Karen asks how should we address below average stats that’s actually our next webinar yeah yeah that’s a great question I would say with with low average stats it’s really important that your essays and their application be as strategic as possible because you do want to highlight all the other parts of your application besides your stats that make you such an outstanding applicant and also you can be strategic in your essays by explaining and highlighting any any improvements you’ve made.

So if you had a decreasing trend early in college and then you improved on that by changing your study strategies by becoming a straight-a student you’d want to add you know address your self-awareness and how you improve to which admissions professionals love to see because they’re looking for students who are teachable who are going to be the best students for their medical school so when you see that someone has a high level of self-awareness and has demonstrated an impressive level of improvement especially academically or in their MCAT scores that is really helpful to getting you an interview because they do want students who are self-aware and who can adapt to any teaching style because you’re going to come across challenges in medical schools inevitable and people who have overcome those in the past successfully will have a higher chance of getting a you know an interview and in an acceptance when you can demonstrate that.

Chopping Up Sentences

I remember once when I was in the very early days of editing people in place and I was editing the work of a a colleague who my new rather well and I was chopping the sentences up and I was changing the pronouns and I was putting the active voice in which we’ll come to in a moment and I gave it back to him and he was pretty downcast I’ve learnt to be kind and now it was pretty downcast and he says what’s wrong with my writing am i using too many dangling participles and I thought my poor darling you wouldn’t know a dangling possibly hit you between the eyes dangling participle.

I had to look one up on the web to get an example because they’re not very common turning the corner a handsome school building appeared well that’s the dangling participle you don’t actually see a handsome school building turning the corner it was you turned the corner I sort of had some school what they were we won’t worry about dangling participles for any any more time at all because you’re not going to use them the active and passive voice now this is something I think it’s a shame that students aren’t taught early on because it’s one of these things that when you taught it as a kid you kind of think you know it even if you don’t and you can go on using it the active voice shows who’s doing what passive voice hides it for people in the forum arriving in the formal register use it a lot because they don’t want to say I think so they say something like surely it will be Kahn conceded or it is generally agreed and but I’ll give you an example that I think you won’t forget it’s the active voice the in the active voice the subject the Baathists insurgents are doing the action we know what’s happening in the passive voice the subject doesn’t do the action the subject suffers it.

And it’s not clear who’s done it so who did it the Baathist insurgents the American troops is Islamist fundamentalists we don’t know so if you use the passive voice a lot you’re going to believe your readers in the dark about a lot and your writing is going to be unclear so short sentences finite verbs clear pronouns and the active voice this is just some more examples which you can look at when you get them print out of a passive construction changed into an active one I’ve just finished editing an article in which the author’s kept saying you know it is generally agreed or it is generally acknowledged and that’s there were two of them I thought they wouldn’t mind in me putting we think or we conclude but not they wouldn’t have it I went back to these generally concluded I thought well okay if they don’t want people to read their article that’s their look at.

The Academic Charm Effect

You may write about global population and a global warming yes that is it effect of something but what remains controversial so you write several paragraphs about what may be the causes of it so my examples are bullying has multiple long term effects such as ABC yes you already know that you will develop a into a paragraph one of the body paragraphs B into another section and C will be another section okay what you should pay attention to is that our thesis statement is usually one sentence it is usually longer the normal sentence but still you try to summarize if you give this a b c you you try to summarize everything and it is important that a B and C have parallel structure so that you write that you can read the examples yes it is irreversible expansive painful work allows the triggers causes you don’t mix that you don’t say it is expensive. Discover other insights about essay at Edusson.

It allows killing and some people oppose against it yes try not to mix that it will sound better that way okay so at last we come down to writing yes we understand what we need because we have read our instructions we have created an outline and we know how much words we can devote to each section we have made research and we know what we can include and into which section yes so we have all the sources all the tabs are open and we know that to support our idea number two we have to use this source and we start combining all that as we combine all that don’t forget about the use of linking words first they sound very clever yes they sound nice they give the academic charm yes to your essay and they make it more quality right away at about first in addition although in spinal however nevertheless we are very important and don’t forget that Ren was side team something you have to introduce that in a nice way you may use such phrases as according to the VOSA yes or the therapy you call them and you write the information you have found integer sources.

All the very useful words are suggest argues point out I sometimes recommend by students when they get stuck on something yes on some part of their their acids just start yes you’re all so for example car suggests and then you start thinking what does he suggest yes when you begin the sentence this way it already gives you an idea where to water it gives you a nice sentence to present something which should find in academic essays how you can present your citation is the results of the study survey conducted by and you cite the author’s yes show or prove or support the assumption that TV has harmful effect on children for example and so on okay the next person reaching the word count it is mission impossible a lot of students struggle with that and they struggle in two different ways some write too much some write too little and then they start thinking about how to expand that.

Working Thesis/Annotated Bibliography

For this step in the research process, you will be

1. Crafting a ‘working’ thesis statement (remember, it may change before the final copy of your paper and that’s okay!) and

2. Creating an annotated bibliography. Both of these will be typed according to MLA format and turned in for a grade.

How to do an Annotated Bibliography:

  1. Find your sources.
    1. Remember, you need a minimum of four sources; one from each of the categories outlined in the Overview of the research paper.
    2. READ your sources. Make sure you understand them and how they might function in your paper.
  2. Create an MLA citation for each of your sources.
    1. I highly recommend you do NOT use a program like ‘Easy Bib’ because it usually messes something up. Use the Purdue OWL as a reference for MLA citations.
      2. MLA citations are always double-spaced, using a hanging indent when continued on to the second and subsequent lines.
    2. Write an annotation for each source.
      1. The annotation will be two parts (mini-paragraphs).
        1. Part 1: Summarize the source. What main ideas are expressed in the source? 3-5 sentences, NOT including your own opinion.
        2. Part 2: Explain how you plan to use the source in your own paper (how will it help you prove your thesis?) and why the source is a credible one. Should be 2-3 sentences.
      2. *The annotation is in your own words, NOT copied from the original sources.
      3. Annotations should be single-spaced.
    3. Compile it all together in MLA format.
      1. Use the general rules for an MLA-formatted paper – 1” margins, 12 pt. TNR, MLA heading, Running Header with your last name & page number, etc.
      2. Title the paper ‘Working Thesis and Annotated Bibliography’
        1. Sub-title with the general topic of your paper (e.g. Public Education in America)
      3. Type your thesis statement.
      4. Follow with your annotated sources (use example as a guide).
        1. Always listed in alphabetical order according to the first thing in the MLA entry
      5. Print one-sided.

Working Thesis Statement

Because the issues that prevent organ donation from being highly effective primarily stem from unfounded myths and worries about the process, with improved education, organ donation could save more lives.

Cronin, Antonia J. and John Harris. “Authorisation, Altruism.” Journal of Medical Ethics, vol. 15, no. 1, 1996, pp. 41-50.

This journal article discusses the selflessness of donating organs. Although it is based on research from the United Kingdom, I believe the overall concept still applies to organ         donation in America. The authors of this article are medical experts.

I will use this article to explain organ donation from the experts’ side. It will give my paper some credibility.

Frangoul, Anmar. “Grieving Families.” CNBC, 15 Jan. 2016. Accessed 31 Jan. 2017.

In this recent article, Frangoul exposes that some families are upset about the organ donation process. These families were involved in making the decision to end life support and to donate their loved ones’ organs, but then later worried that they made the wrong choice. The reporter investigates the reason for this worry.

I plan to use this article to explain how organ donation is misunderstood. I think it represents some widely held beliefs about the dangers of organ donation.

Lovely, Stephen. Irreplaceable. Hachette Books, 2009.

This novel is a touching story about organ donation and how it can bring strangers together. The main character randomly meets the recipient of his loved one’s donated heart, and the connection between the two is undeniable. The story reflects organ donation in a positive light.

I will use this article to represent how organ donation is being portrayed in current American Literature. While the medical and legal concept surrounding organ donation are important, the human side of the experience is significant as well.

Choosing a Topic of Research Paper

Structure of research paper:

Topic (this is the question you are researching)/the position you are defending (persuasive)

  1. Introduction
  2. Attention getter (a general statement loosely related to your topic.)

Example: Every thirty seconds, someone in the United States is killed by a drunk driver, which is two people per minute, one hundred- twenty people per hour.

3. Thesis (the main point of your paper. This should the main focus of your paper.)

Example: The current penalties for drunk driving are not an effective means of keeping people from driving while intoxicated.

4. Directional statement (the three main details that back up or give information about your topic.) It should only be ONE sentence.

Example: The current laws are not working because drunk driving is the number one cause of vehicle related death in the country, it does not address the real issue of people who have alcohol problems and it allows people who have a good lawyer to get their licenses right away if they can afford a good lawyer.

5. Transition statement (a statement wrapping up your intro and moving the reader along to the rest of the paper.)

Example: The current law doesn’t sufficiently punish people enough for putting the lives of others in danger.

Choosing a topic:

1. What are a few topics that interest you?

2. What sort of controversy/issues do those interests present?

3. How are Americans already discussing these issues?

4. How might you add your own voice to this ongoing discussion?

Research Proposal:

• I will begin by researching the general topic of _____________________________, and more specifically, _________________________________________________________________.
• I plan to research different formats of ongoing discussion about this issue. I really hope to find:

• Going into this project, my current understanding and opinion of this topic is:

Ten Questions

Directions: It is helpful to begin the research process by conceding that there are many things you do not yet know about your topic, the sources you may find on that topic, or what you will have to say about the topic. For this reason, it can be beneficial to write down the questions that you have before you begin. Then, while you are researching, you can refer back to this list of questions to remind yourself where you started. It should guide and focus you throughout your search for information.

Doing the Research

Throughout your research process, it is important to keep in mind three important things:
(1) WHAT is the issue?
(2) HOW are Americans addressing this problem? –through their literature, artwork, reporting, formal research, etc.
(3) HOW will I propose my own solution to the problem?

Below, write out MLA Works Cited entries for your selected sources. You need one of each genre (4 minimum), but may cite more if needed.

A. Work of American Literature (prose or poetry)

B. Newspaper/Magazine Article

C. Multimedia

D. Journal Article (JSTOR)

8 Free Websites for Writing a Research Paper

Beginning Steps

Steps in Writing a Research Paper -from Empire State College, this site will walk you through the steps of writing a research paper with worksheets to help, such as choosing a research question, developing a thesis, and evaluating sources.

Owl – Purdue’s Online Writing Lab – step by step instructions for writing a research paper and OWL exercises to help you understand portions of writing papers, ex. Writing Numbers – when to spell them out or write them digitally


If you have trouble finding resources to start, Easy Bib has a Research section that will show you the bibliographies of other users that researched the same topic. It labels each entry as credible or maybe credible to not credible.

If you need more help with writing your paper you can check the Edusson research paper writing service.  The writers walks you through writing a paper from Brainstorming an idea to proofreading and revising.

Citelighter – downloadable tool bar that lets you highlight and save resources puts them on a page with the citation at the bottom of the page. The notes can be rearranged and when imported into Word, the citations become the Bibliography. They have Knowledge cards of research being done by other people. If your topic is not among them they will help create one for you.

Evaluating Web Sites – Cornell University’s Library has a printer-friendly webpage to help you evaluate the sites you may want to use in your research

Paper Review

Paper Rater – Free online grammar checker, plagiarism detector, word choice, sentence length, spelling, etc.

Plagiarism Checker – Checks phrases from your document, allows you to create a Google alert on your phrases

Bibliography Makers

BibMe – Free automatic bibliography maker can be downloaded in MLA, APA, Chicago, or Turabian formats

Sample Research Paper Template

Outline Thesis Statement in Research Paper


I. Introduction

II. Early family life

III. Adult life

IV. Career

V. Accomplishments

VI. Conclusion: Thesis (Why is this person a hero?)

Name (First and Last)
Date (5 May 2015)

(Introduction) Hook and thesis

Body #1 Early life

Body #2 Adult life

Body #3 Career

Body #4 Accomplishments

Conclusion (Thesis and answer the question “Why is this person a hero?”)

Grading Rubric

Thesis statement is one sentence.
Thesis statement has three main points.

There are notes from three sources. One source should be a book.
Works Cited page should be filled out using as notes are taken from each source
Each source should have one direct quote. The page number should be included for the book.

Finalized thesis should be written in the box on the Outline page.
Outline body paragraphs are written in sentence form. These sentences should become the topic sentence for each paragraph.

Rough draft
Introduction has a hook and a thesis.
Research paper body has two direct quotes with internal citations.
Each body paragraph has a topic sentence.
Each paragraph is indented.
There is adequate detail from research for each paragraph.
There are good transitions between ideas.
Spelling is correct.
Capitalization is correct.
Punctuation is correct.
The thesis is restated in the conclusion.

Final draft
Font should be for Verdana 12/ doublespaced.
All information should be converted from the template to actual student information.
Page numbers should be correct.
Works cited entries should be in alphabetical order.

Procedure for Creating Documentation Page On Citation Machine


  1. Open up “Sample Research Paper Template” document.
  2. Open the internet and go to URL “”
  3. From the bottom taskbar right click on “Show windows side by side.”
  4. From Citation machine choose MLA.
  5. Search bar: type “name of your book.
  6. Click on: “Search Books.”
  7. Scroll and find “author’s name.
  8. “Select” the right one.
  9. Scroll down to “Final Step” and click on it.
  10. Scroll down to “Make Citation” and click on it.
  11. Your citation box has a correct copy of your citation. Within the box click on blue “copy”. This step places your citation on your clipboard.
  12. Go to “Work Cited” page on “Sample Research Paper” document.
  13. Paste citation onto your document.


Raven, Peter H., and George B. Johnson. Biology. 6th ed. Boston: McGraw-Hill, 2002. Print.

Procedure for Creating Documentation Page On Citation Machine

Internet Source

  1. Open up a “Sample Research Paper Template” document.
  2. Open the internet and go to URL “”.
  3. From the bottom taskbar right click on “Show windows side by side”.
  4. Copy the URL from the Internet page that you want to cite onto your clipboard.
  5. From Citation Machine choose MLA.
  6. Choose “Website” tab.
  7. Paste URL into the search bar.
  8. Choose “Search Websites”.
  9. “Select” the right one.
  10. Scroll down to “Final Step” and click on it.
  11. Scroll down to “Make Citation” and click on it.
  12. Your citation box has a correct copy of your citation. Within the box click on blue “copy”. This step places your citation on your clipboard.
  13. Go to “Work Cited” page on “Sample Research Paper” document.
  14. Paste citation onto your document.


“Abraham Lincoln.” A&E Networks Television. Web. 24 Apr. 2016.

Step by Step Procedure for Completing the Research Paper

Directions: Check each box as it is completed.

  • Download the “Sample Research Paper Template” into your student folder.
  • Choose a topic (role model) from the choices your teacher provides.
  • Have your teacher initial and date the first box “Topic.”
  • Write a working thesis statement in the box on your contract page. It can be a simple statement of why you think this person is a role model.
  • Have your teacher initial and date the second box “Working Thesis Statement.”
  • Complete all three sources by taking notes in the correct section.
  • As you choose your source capture the URL and immediately copy and paste it into the Work Cited section of your Sample Research Paper Template.
  • Make sure to copy a quote from each source. If it is a book be sure and write down the page number.
  • Have your teacher initial and date the third box “3 Sources and Notes.”
  • Since you have researched and know more about your topic, add information to your thesis on your Outline. Decide on three reasons that this person is a good role model. Make sure your thesis statement is one sentence long.
  • Summarize each paragraph into a single topic sentence.
  • Have your teacher initial and date the fourth box “Outline.”
  • Make sure that the correct information is entered on your Cover page, Outline page, and Works Cited page.
  • Using the information you have gathered in each category, begin filling in your Research section.
  • Make sure that you have at least two quotes that are correctly cited within your paper.
  • Have your teacher initial and date the fifth box “Rough Draft.”
  • Check your paper against the Grading Rubric.
  • Copy your paper.
  • Choose a peer editor to highlight spelling, capitalization, punctuation, organization, and clarity errors.
  • Have the peer editor initial and date the sixth box “Peer Edit.”
  • Using peer suggestions, make changes in your rough draft as needed. Make sure the pages on your Research Paper are numbered correctly. Make sure that you have 2 properly cited quotes.
  • Copy your final draft and turn in your Research Paper on top, your Research Paper Contract next, and your Grading Rubric.

The Incredibly Easy Guide to Shedding Body Fat for the Busy Person, part 2

  1. Avoid Drinking So Much Garbage

Now the truth is really simple… most of us are guilty of drinking way too many terrible calories from sugary drinks such as coke and red bull. But believe me they are doing far more damage to your waistline than you may think.

The only time these drinks should ever be considered are after you have completed a really tough and strenuous workout. Even then I’d avoid them, especially if you want to lose weight.

The drink that will help to melt your excess body fat will be water, and that is exactly what you want to stick to, if you want to get results that matter. Those calorie intense drinks are really tasty but they will do nothing but make you fat in the long run.

Just a single latte a day will cause you to gain an incredible 50 pounds of pure fat over the course of a year. That is how damaging such a thing can be in the long run.

If you really want to lose weight then I’d encourage you to stick to drinking water.

  1. Get Deep With Yourself

The reason that most of us end up trying to lose weight is because we want to look incredibly good when we take our clothes off. However the fact is that you will only ever lose all the weight that you want to lose, when you have a deeper, more meaningful reason to do so.

Don’t think that this is a waste of time because if you are serious about losing a lot of weight fast, then this is going to be the best investment that you ever make! Take is very seriously and it will help you get all the results that you want in no time at all.

  1. Snacking Made Real Simple

It seems that we as a world are used to eating all the time. We have so much available in terms of food that we have become used to constantly snacking all the time. Not great for those of us that really want to lose a lot of weight and fast. This means that the best thing that you are ever going to do for yourself is put down that bag of chips and pick up that piece of apple.

Healthy snacks will promote weight loss and what you should be snacking more on… it’s the junk foods that you want to keep away from! Just keep pushing yourself until you get to the point where you enjoy snacking on things that are really healthy… you’ll be amazed at how much weight you end up losing as a result.

As you can see, losing weight is a complete walk in the park when you know exactly what you need to do. Just follow the process exactly as I have laid out, and there is nothing in this world that can stop you from losing the weight that you want to lose.